[Sls-slp] Re: [Sls-sea-dls] Additional comments on SDLS book

[Dorothea Richter]

Dear all, 

just a few comments concerning the documents Greg sent around.

I´m absolutely fine with Greg`s proposals - please find below some mainly 
editorial remarks:


132x0p11[final]_TM_NEW_SECTION:

- page 1-2, section 1.5 Document Structure: don`t forget the new section 6

- page 1-5, section 1.7 References: the titel of reference [8] should be 
written in italics

- page 6-4, section 6.1.2: "reference" should be written in lower case



355x0r2_final_SDLD_GJK:

- page 1-6, section 1.8 References: the titel of reference [6] should be 
written in italics

- page 5-2, Figure 5-1 (respectively Figure 5-2 and Figure 5-3 on the 
following pages): This is basically a comment for the SDLS colleagues. 
The figure tells us that the "MAC is computed over Primary Header, Secondary 
Header, Security Header and Frame Data". Isn`t this a bit misleading as with 
using the authentication bit mask we will  - in most cases - compute the MAC 
only over certain fields of the Primary Header, the Security Header and the 
Frame Data Field - but not over the Secondary Header and the "rest" of the 
Primary Header. I think we should consider to re-design this figures.



Best regards and have a nice weekend, 
Dorothea
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