[Ccsds-omg-liaison] Initial AB Review of the Cube Sat Reference Model submission

Sun Sep 26 22:20:50 UTC 2021

Made most of the fixes per comments. I also have a few minor changes from Dave that have been added (main one is in paragraph 7.4) and others that mostly match your comments. Will submit this doc as errata and will make new PDF.

I will also submit a slight edit of the xmi and mdzip files to reflect the changes to the documentation.

I am including the errata doc and new inventory in this email and will update PDF, XMI, inventory and errata with Jurgen.

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Daniel BROOKSHIER

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Here is my initial AB review of the Cube Sat Reference Model

Before I start ....
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This has come a loooooooooong way and is now looking really nice, thanks to Daniel's substantial effort! Thank you!

A. Machine Readable Files
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The XMI looks fine.

B. Inventory
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The version stamps of the URLs look wrong. The XMI defines a version stamp of "20210801" in the CSRM URL, but the Inventory uses "20210501". This should be updated to "20210801"

[ luckily for me, I found at least one error :-) ]

C. Document
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General remark:
- The font of all the «stereotype» mentionings is not consistent.
Think this is good now. Reapplied the normal paragraph and lists
- Throughout the document, please insert a blank line after the "Gneralization" bulleted lists.
Done - changed list paragraph to have 4ptspacing after the list.
These, and most of my other comments are EDITORIAL, but I suggeste to fix at Beta-1 publishing the latest, as it would be a real pain to fix in FTF.

You need to discuss the front page with Michelle and Jason, lots of things are in flux there. But I guess there will be a lot more changes until the FTF is over....

The OMG address in "Preface - Restricted Rights Legend" needs updating [This is an OMG Template Error]
Will fix in FTF as none of this has changed in the current template. Need to fix logo then too.

In 7.1.3 MissionNeed - Insert a space between «Mission» and "or by one or more ..."
fixed.

In 7.1.9 ComponentRequirement - shluld the «component» at the end of the first line be capitalized? («Component»)?
fixed.

In 7.1.11 SpaceSegmentRequirement - Inconsitent font size throughout the paragraph.
fixed

In 7.4.2 Validation - The formating of the "Parameters" list looks odd.
Not sure what the issues are. I did update this with the latest bulleted paragraph formatting.

D. Final Question
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Can a Cube Sat be round …….. ??  ;-)
Cube Sats must conform to, "Pie are round. Cornbread/CubeSat are square!" See also: https://www.tennessean.com/story/news/2015/03/13/pi-day-events-nashville/70299782/
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