[Moims-dai] OAIS Final v3 Draft review- list of items to be verified

[Roberta Svanetti]

Dear DAI WG Team,

as discussed in the last Skype call, please find my list of comments or items to be checked in the final version of the OAIS reviewed document.
Please note that my comments are related to the printed out copy of the version with file name "OAIS final v3 clean draft-20190904.docx" .
In the printed out copy there are still some comments of your changes.

Page vii please check table of content in the printed out version
Page ix in the list of tables  for table 4-1 an error bookmark not defined appears
Page 1-6 add acronyms CPU (ref page 5-13), ID (ref page 5-4) , TAR (ref. page 4-35) , add TCP/IP, HTTP, USB (ref. page 6-2)
Page 1-7 in 1.6.2 please check the Access Functional Entity definition with the first sentence in 4.1 (pages 4-1, 4-2) some incongruences exist like contains instead of provides etc.
Page 1-8 please check Administration Functional Entity definition with the first sentence in 4.1  some incongruences exist like contains instead of provides etc.
                please check Archival Storage Functional Entity definition with the first sentence in 4.1  some incongruences exist like contains instead of provides etc.
Page 1-9 please check Data Management Functional Entity definition with the first sentence in 4.1  some incongruences exist like contains instead of provides etc.
Page 1-11 please check Ingest Functional Entity definition with the first sentence in 4.1  some incongruences exist  like contains instead of provides etc.
Page 1-13 please check Preservation Planning Functional Entity definition with the first sentence in 4.1  some incongruences exist in the text
Page 2-5 a comment appears near "schematically in figure 2-3"
Page 2-7 an error appears near [D8] reference
Page 3-3 please check the sentence Digital Migration issues are addressed more fully in 5.15.1 ( I have not found this paragraph in the document)
Page 4-19 in the sentence "the Generate DIP .... " change AIPS with AIPs.
Page 4-30 change the text between () from Subsection 5.2 (Preservation ...) to     Subsection 5.2 (Adding Representation Information)
Page 4-33 in correspondence of reference D2 an error appears, the same in correspondence of the table in annex B
Page 4-35 an error in the label of the Table -1 Examples of PDI appears
Page 4-37 change Figure 4 14 in 4-14
Page 5-14 the matrix is without number of table
Page 6-3 the sentence "Distributed Digital Preservation ..." why digital preservation appears as deleted?
Page D-1 in the printed out copy all the references from [D1]  to [D9] have an error, only [D10] is correctly printed.
Page F-1 Again the reference to the CCSDS Information Report [D9] is displayed with an error.

Kind Regards,

Roberta Svanetti
Area Digital Knowledge Life - Operations Manager
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