[Css-csts] RE: CSTS Specification Framework Concepts Draft 11

[Ray, Timothy J. (GSFC-5830)]

Dear Martin,

This is excellent material!  Great job!  Although I have a few very minor suggestions below, overall I found this book (especially the first half) to be outstanding.

Section 5.6, the second sub-section 'b':
The idea is fine but the wording can be improved - let's have a go in Colorado Springs.  

Section 7.2: 
In my opinion, the second paragraph should include a little more explanation/clarification.  

Section 7.3a:  
The idea is fine but the wording can be improved.  Consider changing the wording from:
    "Request start of the data transfer, specifying the selection criteria's of the data to transfer (START operation);"    to:
    "Request start of the data transfer; specifying the criteria to apply when selecting the data to transfer;"

Best regards,
Tim



-----Original Message-----
From: css-csts-bounces at mailman.ccsds.org [mailto:css-csts-bounces at mailman.ccsds.org] On Behalf Of Martin Götzelmann
Sent: Friday, April 10, 2009 6:28 AM
To: css-csts at mailman.ccsds.org
Subject: [Css-csts] CSTS Specification Framework Concepts Draft 11

Members of the CSTS WG,
 
I have uploaded Draft 11 of the Concepts Green Book to the CWE area for your review. The document can be found at:
 
CCS-CSTS -> CWE Private -> SLE Toolkit Procedures -> CSTS SFW Concepts G-0.11
 
Unfortunately, the updates are not yet complete. Section 10 (How to Specify a CSTS) and the material in Annex C (CSTS Specification Example) have just been copied from Draft 10 without modification. Annex A (Definition of Terms) still needs to be prepared.
 
I will try to prepare some of the missing text before the meeting, but for section 10, it might be appropriate to wait until the guidelines are a little more progressed.
 
Looking forward to see you in Colorado Springs,
 
Martin
 

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