[Sea-sa] Updates to RASDS++ document for Monday, 8 Jan 24 review

[Shames, Peter M (US 312B)]

Dear RASDS++ colleagues,

Ramon and Costin have provided their updates to the Physical, Structural, and Operations section of the document.   Over this past week I did a cover to cover review of the document and created a marked up paper copy (yup, real paper) that shows all of the major moves of text sections and reorganization of section flows, as agreed in the Nov meeting and documented in the 7 Dec 23 email notes.

The current version of that document is attached for review on Monday, 8 Jan.

Status:

  *   Major edits have been “roughed in” from start to the end of Sec 6 (Structural)
  *   The flow of each section has been “normalized” to an evolved version of what was described in the 7 Dec email
  *   The Applicability and Rationale parts of Sec 1 have been edited, but still need work
  *   The “academic” text that was in Sec 2 has been moved to a new Annex C
  *   The viewpoint introductions that were in Sec 2 have been eliminated, except for the overview parts
  *   Some of the text that remains in Sec 2 still needs to be edited and condensed
  *   The set of simple viewpoint diagrams that were in Sec 2 are being merged into the Sec 4-10 text
  *   The Enterprise section still needs a new/revised diagram to cover launch and/or OOS
  *   The Operations section is distinctly different in form than the others and needs to be edited for flow and alignment

Please take a look if you can make the time available and see if it doesn’t flow better now than it did before.  Track changes is on, but the mark-ups have been turned off for easier reading.

Hope to see you on Monday.

Best regards, Peter

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