[SLS] Your comments needed for SANA document under poll // 313x0y21_CESG_Approval.pdf

[Gian.Paolo.Calzolari at esa.int]

Dear All,
        the attached document is under CESG Poll.
Since "The document describes the relationship between SANA and the other 
stakeholders within CCSDS, such as the CCSDS Engineering Steering Group 
(CESG), the CMC, WGs, and the CCSDS Secretariat" it is potentially 
affecting all your activities.

For this reason any comment (to be reflected in the SLS vote to the CESG 
Poll) is welcome by 
13 February COB.

Thanks

Gian Paolo

PS As preliminary comments.....
1)  I think section 3.6. should be split between "WG Relationship" and 
"CESG Relationship" as e.g.  the very first sentence "The SANA Operator 
shall be informed by a WG of any new registries, or of changes to existing 
registries, prior to when the WG submits the Red Book (or Pink Sheet) for 
its first agency review." does affect WGs and not CESG. ACtually there is 
a section 3.10 for WGs but thiss should be put earlier as WGs are the 
first to start interaction with SANA.
2) Sentence "The CESG shall review the Candidate registry prior to 
approving the release of the document for its first Agency review." is 
ambiguous as it looks there is dedicated review of the candidate review 
while there is simply a CESG Poll to approve releasing a document - that 
includes a SANA Annex - for Agency Review) 
3) Also the following sentence "When clarifications or changes are 
required, they must be performed by the WG prior to the request for 
approval of the document for Agency Review" is part of the actions after a 
failed CESG poll (rejected or approved with conditions).
4) The sentence "This last technical review will be done prior to CESG 
approval to publish." introduces an additional dedicated Review to be 
performed before the CESG Poll for publication.
5) The final NOTE in section 3.6 is just ambygous. Does CESG mean CESG 
Chair? Who will trigger the verification on the SANA Beta site?
6) The contents of the SANA Annex as describe din 3.9 (The SANA 
Considerations shall document all information needed for SANA to make 
assignments or changes to, or to create new registries.) actually describe 
the interaction required with SABA before publication. Is the reader of 
the published document interested in this or should the annex rather 
describe which registries are avaiable after that process and with which 
rules/constraints?
etc etc.


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