[MOIMS-NAV-EXEC] [EXTERNAL] Re-Entry Data Message Red Book 1.6 Proofreading Assignments

[Berry, David S (3920)]

Alexandru:

Attached is the completion of my proofreading of the RDM R1.6. I meant to send this last night, but I had some high priority action items for my other main task that I had to address and couldn't finish until today.

Sorry for delay...

When I receive from you the RDM R1.7 with updates from all the proofreading, I'll send it to Mario with a request for the "approval to publish" polls.

Also attached is the "RDM Blue Book Approach Plan"... targeted for beer in Darmstadt!

David




On 6/5/19, 5:44 AM, "Berry, David S (3920)" <david.s.berry at jpl.nasa.gov> wrote:

    
    Alexandru:
    
    Attached is my CRM for the RDM proofreading assignment. My comments cover the document from the beginning through Annex E. I have 13 pages left to review that I plan to finish later today, but wanted to send you this. It covers the entirety of my assigned document sections.
    
    Regards,
    David
    
    
    
    
    On 5/17/19, 12:15 PM, "MOIMS-NAV-EXEC on behalf of Berry, David S (3920) via MOIMS-NAV-EXEC" <moims-nav-exec-bounces at mailman.ccsds.org on behalf of moims-nav-exec at mailman.ccsds.org> wrote:
    
        
        All:
            
        Attached are materials for the "divide & conquer" proofreading of the "Re-Entry Data Message" Red Book version 1.6 (section assignments, a blank CRM, and the "changes accepted" version of the document).
            
        Alexandru has updated the version of the document we discussed at Mountain View last week to remove Annex B. We believe it to be technically ready for publication.
            
        However, we need to perform a proofreading of the document before proceeding to the next step. Assignments are on average about 12 pages (62 pages requiring proofreading, 5 groups of reviewers, average 12.4 pages each); two are a bit longer, two a bit shorter.
            
        Please note your assignments in the attachment, review the assigned pages for editorial corrections, fill out the CRM if you find anything that needs to be corrected**, and send it to (at minimum) me and Alexandru by 31-May-2019 **. You may also send to the WG mailing list if you prefer.
            
        ** Definition of "anything that needs to be corrected": The focus of this effort is grammar, spelling, awkward wording, missing words, etc. As noted, in the recent Spring Meetings, we agreed that the document was technically ready for publication. However, from a technical standpoint, if you think there is something that is WRONG, identify that; if there is something UNCLEAR, suggest a clarification. Otherwise, we leave it alone in this proofreading. Ignore page numbering and other footer artifacts; these will be corrected by the CCSDS Technical Editor.
            
        Please advise if issues arise...
            
        Regards, and Thanks!
        David
        
        ** Alexandru: You expressed interest in keeping the same target date for proofreading that we assigned at Mountain View (i.e., 29-May-2019), but since I inserted a couple of days delay by asking you about the potential conflict I identified, I added two days to the target (i.e., 31-May-2019. Hope that's OK... please advise if not.)
            
            
        
        
    
    

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