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'computer system', 'physical system', 'engineered system', 'social
system' , 'planetary system' etc. What they have in common is a question open for debate and various descriptions may be equally valid. <br clear="none"></span></div><div dir="ltr"><span><br clear="none"></span></div><div dir="ltr"><span>E.g., if we look at Merriam-Webster's dictionary we see various senses of the word, some of which are about policies, others about a system computation systems, etc. But a commonality is that a system as a unified collection of elements (broadly construed) working together (in some manner) for some purpose.<br clear="none"></span></div><div dir="ltr"><span><br clear="none"></span></div><div dir="ltr"><span></span>d) Some qualifying features for different kinds of system were mentioned in the discussion thus far, that some of those dictionary definitions have as senses unto themselves.<br clear="none"></div><div dir="ltr"><span><br clear="none"></span></div><div dir="ltr"><span>e) it seems a focus is on those systems created by persons. That is very specific for a highly generic term like 'system', given (c) and given that it seems reasonable to consider other things like planetary systems as kinds of system. <br clear="none"></span></div><div dir="ltr"><span><br clear="none"></span></div><div dir="ltr">f) So perhaps one approach is to form a more specific phrase that better captures the intended meaning we want here. And either <span>leave 'system' undefined or describe it in a generic and minimal fashion.</span></div><div dir="ltr"><br clear="none"></div><div dir="ltr">g) However, (e) may only be on point if there is in fact no common features of system to all other potential kinds (e.g. planetary, social, computational, architectural, etc.). Or (e) may not be a concern if we assert that the concept of system is only applicable to the artificial.<br clear="none"></div><div><br clear="none"></div><div dir="ltr">Anyway, my two cents. I hope it wasn't confusing. <br clear="none"></div><div dir="ltr"><br clear="none"></div><div dir="ltr">Please be safe in the global health climate.<br clear="none"></div><div><br clear="none"></div><div>Very respectfully,</div><div><div class="ydp187d8ed6yiv0983177592ydp10393cf1gmail_signature"><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr">Robert <font size="2">Rovetto</font><br clear="none"><div>--</div><div><br clear="none"></div><div><br clear="none"></div></div><div dir="ltr"><div><font size="2"><span><span><span></span></span></span><span></span></font><span style="font-size:16px;"><span></span><span></span><font style="background-color:inherit;" size="2"><i><span></span></i></font></span><span style="font-size:16px;"> <span><span style="font-size:16px;"><font style="background-color:inherit;" size="2"><i><span><span><span style="font-size:16px;"><span><span style="font-size:16px;"><font style="background-color:inherit;" size="2"><i><span></span></i></font></span></span></span></span></span></i></font></span></span></span></div><div dir="ltr"><div><font size="2"> </font><span style="font-size:16px;"><span><span style="font-size:16px;"><font style="background-color:inherit;" size="2"><span><span><span>NASA Datanauts Open Data Initiative</span><span></span></span></span><span></span></font></span></span></span></div><span style="font-size:16px;"><span><span style="font-size:16px;"><font style="background-color:inherit;" size="2"><span></span></font></span></span></span></div><span style="font-size:16px;"><span><span style="font-size:16px;"></span></span></span><div><div><font size="2"><span></span><span><a shape="rect" href="http://www.coder.umd.edu/node/287" rel="nofollow" target="_blank">Research Affiliate</a>,
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On Wednesday, August 26, 2020, 7:34:48 PM EDT, Shames, Peter M (US 312B) via MOIMS-DAI <moims-dai@mailman.ccsds.org> wrote:
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal">Dear David, et al,</p>
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal">In general, while I could accept what you propose I would do it rather reluctantly, and for the following reasons:</p>
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<ol style="margin-top:0in;" type="1" start="1"><li class="yiv0983177592MsoListParagraph" style="margin-left:0in;">In Wikipedia, that font of all knowledge, system, in information and computer science, is define like this: "<b>system</b> is a hardware system,
<a rel="nofollow" shape="rect" target="_blank" href="https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Software_system" title="Software system">software system</a>, or combination, which has
<a rel="nofollow" shape="rect" target="_blank" href="https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Component_(UML)" title="Component (UML)">components</a> as its structure and observable
<a rel="nofollow" shape="rect" target="_blank" href="https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Inter-process_communication" title="Inter-process communication">
inter-process communications</a> as its behavior."</li><li class="yiv0983177592MsoListParagraph" style="margin-left:0in;">In the CCSDS glossary, that font of our corporate knowledge, system is defined like this: (CCSDS 311.0-M-1) "
<b>A set of elements</b> (people, products [hardware and software], facilities, equipment, material, and processes [automated as well as manual procedures]) that are related and whose behavior satisfies customer and/or operational needs".</li><li class="yiv0983177592MsoListParagraph" style="margin-left:0in;">Or like this: (CCSDS 910.2-G-1) " A set of one or more computers, the associated software, peripherals, terminals, human operators, physical processes, information transfer means,
etc., that forms an autonomous whole capable of performing information processing and/or information transfer."</li></ol>
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal">It is only these OAIS definitions that stray so far from the norm as to attempt to define this particular kind of "system" as being first and foremost about "organizations", as in the original definition, or now, about "policies, procedures,
hardware, software, and information." Systems are systems. Policies are organizational guidance about how organizations carry out their tasks. Procedures are instructions about the steps organizations are to follow in carrying out their tasks. Neither
of these are the primary elements of a system, they are strictly ancillary to the use of the system, but useful to the organization. Likewise information, for that matter. Systems may store, transfer, and manipulate information, but they are not that information.</p>
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;"><b>Policy</b> (Wikpedia): A <b>policy</b> is a
<a rel="nofollow" shape="rect" target="_blank" href="https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Deliberation" title="Deliberation">deliberate</a> system of
<a rel="nofollow" shape="rect" target="_blank" href="https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Principle" title="Principle">principles</a> to guide decisions and achieve rational outcomes. A policy is a statement of intent, and is implemented as a procedure or protocol. Policies are generally adopted by a
<a rel="nofollow" shape="rect" target="_blank" href="https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Governance" title="Governance">governance</a> body within an organization.</p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;"> </p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;"><b>Procedure</b> (Wikipedia): a set of step-by-step instructions compiled by an
<a rel="nofollow" shape="rect" target="_blank" href="https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Organization" title="Organization">organization</a> to help workers carry out
<b>complex</b> routine operations. </p>
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal">As an instance of a particular kind of SYSTEM, please adopt a straightforward definition of OAIS that does not convolve these other, separate, terms into the definition nor make them the prominent features of the definition.
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal">It's a quibble, but the addition of that phrase "<span style="color:red;">but is not limited to</span><span style="color:black;">" seems vague and to add no value. It's rather like sticking ", etc" at the end of a sentence when you cannot
summon up another concrete item to add to a list. But in fact, placed as it is, it seems to
<u>take away</u> meaning from the very concrete definition that should follow it. Please remove it.</span></p>
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal">I do not have any issue with the use of "put in place" (or "acquired", or "employed") nor the reference to "staff", in the last sentence.</p>
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal">Is it safe to assume that the other changes I proposed have been adopted as proposed or are there changes to these as well? Your note was unclear.</p>
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal">Thanks, Peter</p>
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;"><b><span style="font-size:12.0pt;color:black;">From:
</span></b><span style="font-size:12.0pt;color:black;">David Giaretta <david@giaretta.org><br clear="none">
<b>Date: </b>Wednesday, August 26, 2020 at 4:22 AM<br clear="none">
<b>To: </b>Peter Shames <peter.m.shames@jpl.nasa.gov><br clear="none">
<b>Cc: </b>'MOIMS-Data Archive Interoperability' <moims-dai@mailman.ccsds.org><br clear="none">
<b>Subject: </b>RE: [Moims-dai] [EXTERNAL] RE: CESG conditions on your OAIS Reference Model, CCSDS 650.0-P-2.0</span></p>
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;">Dear Peter</p>
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;">The DAI WG reached consensus at yesterday’s meeting to accept your proposals but with a few changes to your proposed definition of OAIS Archive which we think is a bit clearer.</p>
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;">The following shows our changes, with your text as the basis. A few words of your text have been deleted (double strikeout) and additional words inserted (red text).</p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;"> </p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;">Some points to explain the changes:</p>
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<span style="">1)<span style="font:7.0pt New;">
</span></span>Add “policies” and “information”</p>
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<span style="">2)<span style="font:7.0pt New;">
</span></span>To make it clear that the Archive organisation does not have to develop the system itself we use the words “put in place”</p>
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<span style="">3)<span style="font:7.0pt New;">
</span></span>In order to clean up the Glossary definition we move the the reference to the section which specifies the mandatory responsibilities to a NOTE.
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<b>Open Archival Information System (OAIS)</b>:<b> </b>An Archive system consist<span style="color:red;">s</span><s>ing</s> of<span style="color:red;">, but is not limited to, policies, procedures,</span> hardware, software, and
<span style="color:red;">information. </span><s>procedures </s><span style="color:red;">The Archive system is
</span><s>developed</s> <span style="color:red;">put in place and </span>operated by an organization<span style="color:red;"> and its staff</span>. The organization has accepted the responsibility to preserve information and make it available for a Designated
Community. The organisation may be part of a larger organisation. <s>The system</s>
<span style="color:red;">An OAIS Archive </span>meets a set of <span style="color:red;">
mandatory</span> responsibilities<s>, as defined in section 4,</s> that allows an OAIS Archive to be distinguished from other uses of the term ‘archive’. The term ‘Open’ in OAIS is used to imply that this Recommended Practice and future related Recommended
Practices and standards are developed in open forums, and it does not imply that access to the Archive is unrestricted.</p>
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NOTE - The set of mandatory responsibilities an OAIS Archive must perform are defined in section 3.2</p>
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;">I hope you concur with this. We can then go forward with this improved version of OAIS. Once again I want to thank you for suggesting many improvements.</p>
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;">Regards</p>
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;">..David</p>
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<b>On Behalf Of </b>Shames, Peter M (US 312B) via MOIMS-DAI<br clear="none">
<b>Sent:</b> 18 August 2020 18:56<br clear="none">
<b>To:</b> david@giaretta.org<br clear="none">
<b>Cc:</b> Shames, Peter M (US 312B) <peter.m.shames@jpl.nasa.gov>; MOIMS-DAI List <moims-dai@mailman.ccsds.org><br clear="none">
<b>Subject:</b> Re: [Moims-dai] [EXTERNAL] RE: CESG conditions on your OAIS Reference Model, CCSDS 650.0-P-2.0</p>
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;">Dear David, et al,</p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;"> </p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;">I'd like to thank you and your team for taking my suggestions seriously and for working diligently to improve the clarity of the document. I am really glad that you took this opportunity to make these long overdue
changes. I suspect that your community will also appreciate the changes.</p>
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;">I have read the document (a quick skim this time), and find that I agree with all of the changes that you have made. The added clarity in use of terms and diagrams helps a lot. I did find a few relatively minor
items that I still wish to ask that you fix. Instead of doing the usual "change this to that" PID format I just made the proposed changes directly in the text, which I have attached with Track Changes turned on. For transparency, I will tell you where to
look:</p>
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;">Sec 1.1: fixed the definition of an OAIS to align with the usual notion of what a "system" is:</p>
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:1.0in;"><span style="color:#0070C0;">An OAIS is an Archive system consisting of hardware, software, and procedures developed and operated by an organization. The organization has accepted the responsibility to preserve
information and make it available for a <b>Designated Community</b>. The organization may be part of a larger organization.</span></p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;"> </p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;">Made the same change in sec 1.6.2 Terminology.</p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;"> </p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;">In other sections and sub-sections I added a clarifying sentences in the intro paragraphs, of the general form: "This sub-section (<u>or this entire section</u>) is non-normative.". I am concerned that without
this sort of clarity the mix of normative and non-normative materials in various sections can cause confusion. I did not want it to be too intrusive, but I think we must be clear.
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;"> </p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;">To take the "sting" out of this, in some sections I added an explanatory sentence, like this one in Sec 4.2:</p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;"> </p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:1.0in;"><span style="color:#0070C0;">This entire subsection is informative, but provides useful abstractions for understanding how an OAIS might be designed.</span></p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;"> </p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;">I hope that you and your team can accept these changes. If the answer is yes you have my concurrence to go forward.</p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;"> </p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:.5in;">Thanks, Peter</p>
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:1.0in;"><b><span style="font-size:12.0pt;color:black;">From:
</span></b><span style="font-size:12.0pt;color:black;">David Giaretta <<a rel="nofollow" shape="rect" ymailto="mailto:david@giaretta.org" target="_blank" href="mailto:david@giaretta.org">david@giaretta.org</a>><br clear="none">
<b>Date: </b>Tuesday, August 18, 2020 at 9:07 AM<br clear="none">
<b>To: </b>Peter Shames <<a rel="nofollow" shape="rect" ymailto="mailto:peter.m.shames@jpl.nasa.gov" target="_blank" href="mailto:peter.m.shames@jpl.nasa.gov">peter.m.shames@jpl.nasa.gov</a>><br clear="none">
<b>Cc: </b>MOIMS-DAI List <<a rel="nofollow" shape="rect" ymailto="mailto:moims-dai@mailman.ccsds.org" target="_blank" href="mailto:moims-dai@mailman.ccsds.org">moims-dai@mailman.ccsds.org</a>><br clear="none">
<b>Subject: </b>Re: [Moims-dai] [EXTERNAL] RE: CESG conditions on your OAIS Reference Model, CCSDS 650.0-P-2.0</span></p>
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:1.0in;">Dear Peter</p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:1.0in;"> </p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:1.0in;">Steve Hughes provided us with feedback following your discussion with him. As a result we have taken an in-depth look at the conformance sections, the definitions and discussion of Representation Information, and
in particular “Semantic Information”, and the discussion of Representation Information Networks. I believe we have made significant improvements to OAIS as a result. Some of the text dates back to the original version of OAIS; it is only thanks to your insistence
that we were forced to recognize a number of weaknesses and sources of confusion for readers.</p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:1.0in;"> </p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:1.0in;">The updated document is available at
<a rel="nofollow" shape="rect" target="_blank" href="https://urldefense.us/v3/__https:/cwe.ccsds.org/moims/docs/MOIMS-DAI/Draft*20Documents/OAIS*20v3/650x0020_CESG_Aproval_Mod-20200818.doc?Web=0__;JSU!!PvBDto6Hs4WbVuu7!Z6HocMIOLyix828rKmjcw8oXm4kvxDc7FslUfK9mFl4AgzgYOB_8YzJbr7ELtVAvJ4ZPi7qM$">
https://cwe.ccsds.org/moims/docs/MOIMS-DAI/Draft%20Documents/OAIS%20v3/650x0020_CESG_Aproval_Mod-20200818.doc?Web=0</a></p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:1.0in;"> </p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:1.0in;">A short list of the changes are:</p>
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<span style="">-<span style="font:7.0pt New;">
</span></span>The conformance section 1.4 has been clarified as you suggested and the individual sections are clearly marked as “normative”</p>
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<span style="">-<span style="font:7.0pt New;">
</span></span>We checked the use of shall/must. One instance of “must” was missing from a section marked as normative. We found we did have some uses of “must” in informative sections, which we re-phrased.
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<span style="">-<span style="font:7.0pt New;">
</span></span>Changed the name of Semantic Information to “Semantic Representation Information” to avoid confusion with Semantic networks etc. The definition has been clarified to
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<span style=""><span style="">o<span style="font:7.0pt New;">
</span></span></span>“Semantic Representation Information: The Representation Information that further describes the meaning of the Data Object, and its parts or elements, beyond that provided by the Structure Representation Information.”</p>
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<span style="">-<span style="font:7.0pt New;">
</span></span>There is a similar change for Structure Information to “Structure Representation Information”, which is now defined as
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<span style=""><span style="">o<span style="font:7.0pt New;">
</span></span></span>“Structure Representation Information: The Representation Information that imparts information about the arrangement of and the organization of the parts or elements of the Data Object”</p>
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<span style="">-<span style="font:7.0pt New;">
</span></span>The explanation of Representation Information Networks has been updated, with some new diagrams which we hope make the concept very clear.
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<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:1.0in;"> </p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:1.0in;">We hope that clears the way for progressing OAIS to the next stage.</p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:1.0in;"> </p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:1.0in;">Regards</p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:1.0in;"> </p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:1.0in;">..David</p>
<p class="yiv0983177592MsoNormal" style="margin-left:1.0in;"> </p>
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