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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-GB link="#0563C1" vlink="#954F72"><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal>Thanks Roberta<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I’ve edited the document – see comments below:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>..David<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><div><div style='border:none;border-top:solid #E1E1E1 1.0pt;padding:3.0pt 0cm 0cm 0cm'><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><b><span lang=EN-US style='mso-fareast-language:EN-GB'>From:</span></b><span lang=EN-US style='mso-fareast-language:EN-GB'> MOIMS-DAI <moims-dai-bounces@mailman.ccsds.org> <b>On Behalf Of </b>Roberta Svanetti<br><b>Sent:</b> 19 September 2019 22:03<br><b>To:</b> MOIMS-Data Archive Interoperability <moims-dai@mailman.ccsds.org><br><b>Subject:</b> [Moims-dai] OAIS Final v3 Draft review- list of items to be verified<o:p></o:p></span></p></div></div><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><a name="_Hlk525895900"><span lang=IT>Dear DAI WG Team,<o:p></o:p></span></a></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=IT><o:p> </o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>as discussed in the last Skype call, please find my list of comments or items to be checked in the final version of the OAIS reviewed document.<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Please note that my comments are related to the <b>printed out copy</b> of the version with file name “OAIS final v3 clean draft-20190904.docx” .<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>In the printed out copy there are still some comments of your changes.<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US><o:p> </o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Some errors arose because you may have needed to update the cross-references.<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US><o:p> </o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Page vii please check table of content in the printed out version<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>update the cross-references<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Page ix in the list of tables for table 4-1 an error bookmark not defined appears<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>update the cross-references<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Page 1-6 add acronyms CPU (ref page 5-13), ID (ref page 5-4) , TAR (ref. page 4-35) , add TCP/IP, HTTP, USB (ref. page 6-2)<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>OKK except TAR, which is not now an acronym<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Page 1-7 in 1.6.2 please check the Access Functional Entity definition with the first sentence in 4.1 (pages 4-1, 4-2) some incongruences exist like contains instead of provides etc.<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Changed “contains” to “provides”<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Page 1-8 please check Administration Functional Entity definition with the first sentence in 4.1 some incongruences exist like contains instead of provides etc.<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US> please check Archival Storage Functional Entity definition with the first sentence in 4.1 some incongruences exist like contains instead of provides etc.<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Changed “contains” to “provides”<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Page 1-9 please check Data Management Functional Entity definition with the first sentence in 4.1 some incongruences exist like contains instead of provides etc.<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Made the text consistent<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Page 1-11 please check Ingest Functional Entity definition with the first sentence in 4.1 some incongruences exist like contains instead of provides etc.<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Made the text consistent<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Page 1-13 please check Preservation Planning Functional Entity definition with the first sentence in 4.1 some incongruences exist in the text<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Made the text consistent<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Page 2-5 a comment appears near “schematically in figure 2-3”<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>I don’t see it<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Page 2-7 an error appears near [D8] reference<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>update the cross-references<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Page 3-3 please check the sentence Digital Migration issues are addressed more fully in 5.15.1 ( I have not found this paragraph in the document)<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>There were two references to 5.1 – I removed one of these.<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Page 4-19 in the sentence “the Generate DIP …. “ change AIPS with AIPs.<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>OK<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Page 4-30 change the text between () from Subsection 5.2 (Preservation …) to Subsection 5.2 (Adding Representation Information)<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>OK<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Page 4-33 in correspondence of reference D2 an error appears, the same in correspondence of the table in annex B<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>update the cross-references<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Page 4-35 an error in the label of the Table -1 Examples of PDI appears<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>update the cross-references<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Page 4-37 change Figure 4 14 in 4-14<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>OK<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Page 5-14 the matrix is without number of table<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>I added a number and caption <o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Page 6-3 the sentence “Distributed <u>Digital Preservation …” </u>why digital preservation appears as deleted?<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Yes – someone changed the font rather than delete<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Page D-1 in the printed out copy all the references from [D1] to [D9] have an error, only [D10] is correctly printed.<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>update the cross-references<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Page F-1 Again the reference to the CCSDS Information Report [D9] is displayed with an error.<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>update the cross-references<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US><o:p> </o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US>Kind Regards,<o:p></o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=EN-US><o:p> </o:p></span></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:36.0pt'><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><b><span lang=IT style='mso-fareast-language:IT'>Roberta Svanetti</span></b></span><span style='mso-bookmark:_Hlk525895900'><span lang=IT style='mso-fareast-language:IT'><br>Area Digital 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