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<p>Hi Daniel and all,</p>
<p>I was finalizing my comments when this came in and totally concur
with Manfred, so no need for the duplication. This looks really
good, Daniel, and I'm sure that Dave / INCOSE will be delighted to
have this completed.</p>
<p>With respect to Manfred's comments, I think the right answer is
(1) revise the inventory as he suggests, and (2) if you want to
update the document now (as in prior to a vote to recommend this
in the Space DTF and then in the AB next week) rather than doing
so in FTF, the right approach would be to create an errata for the
changes in the document that is voted on with the original
document next week. You can optionally also create a new
convenience document that shows those changes, but the task force
and AB will need to vote on the original document with the errata.</p>
<p>So - if you want to update the document you'll need two new
document numbers from Juergen - one for the inventory and a second
one for the errata. And IF you choose to do so, a third document
number for the new convenience document.</p>
<p>"See" you next week,</p>
<p>Elisa<br>
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<div class="">Here is my initial AB review of the Cube Sat
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<div class="">Before I start ....</div>
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<div class="">This has come a loooooooooong way and is now looking
really nice, thanks to Daniel's substantial effort! Thank you!</div>
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<div class="">A. Machine Readable Files</div>
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<div class="">The XMI looks fine.</div>
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<div class="">B. Inventory</div>
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<div class="">The version stamps of the URLs look wrong. The XMI
defines a version stamp of "20210801" in the CSRM URL, but the
Inventory uses "20210501". This should be updated to "20210801"</div>
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<div class="">[ luckily for me, I found at least one error :-) ]</div>
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<div class="">C. Document</div>
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<div class="">General remark: </div>
<div class="">- The font of all the «stereotype» mentionings is
not consistent. </div>
<div class="">- Throughout the document, please insert a blank
line after the "Gneralization" bulleted lists.</div>
<div class="">These, and most of my other comments are EDITORIAL,
but I suggeste to fix at Beta-1 publishing the latest, as it
would be a real pain to fix in FTF.</div>
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<div class="">You need to discuss the front page with Michelle and
Jason, lots of things are in flux there. But I guess there will
be a lot more changes until the FTF is over....</div>
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<div class="">The OMG address in "Preface - Restricted Rights
Legend" needs updating [This is an OMG Template Error]</div>
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<div class="">In 7.1.3 MissionNeed - Insert a space between
«Mission» and "or by one or more ..."</div>
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<div class="">In 7.1.9 ComponentRequirement - shluld the
«component» at the end of the first line be capitalized?
(«Component»)?</div>
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<div class="">In 7.1.11 SpaceSegmentRequirement - Inconsitent font
size throughout the paragraph.</div>
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<div class="">In 7.4.2 Validation - The formating of the
"Parameters" list looks odd.</div>
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<div class="">D. Final Question</div>
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<div class="">Can a Cube Sat be round …….. ?? ;-)</div>
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